Just a bit of constructive criticism here, please take it in the spirit it is intended. The captions add almost nothing to this strip. They merely describe what’s going on in the panels, which we can see for ourselves.
This was common in comic books at one time (folks like Bill Mantlo and Marv Wolfman are notorious for it) but now it just seems redundant.
Thanks for your input, but the choice of writing style in this comic is deliberate, and intentionally harkens back to the comics of my youth. The intent is to evoke not only the first-person style of so much “sword & planet” fiction, but to convey the main character’s emotional perspective on what’s happening. Sure – you could follow the action of the tale by the art alone – Gene’s an excellent graphic storyteller – but you’d have a lot less insight into Donovan Hawke’s personality, and thus, only part of the story. I hope that as the adventure goes along (we’re only on page five, after all) you’ll get a better idea of what I’m going for, and see that Hawke’s perspective (via the captions) adds an extra layer to the storytelling.
Femme Noir by Mills and Staton
Gravedigger by Mills & Burchett
Lady Sabre by Rucka & Burchett
Ace Kilroy by Kelly & O'Connor
Simone & Ajax by Andrew Pepoy
Trekker by Ron Randall
Just a bit of constructive criticism here, please take it in the spirit it is intended. The captions add almost nothing to this strip. They merely describe what’s going on in the panels, which we can see for ourselves.
This was common in comic books at one time (folks like Bill Mantlo and Marv Wolfman are notorious for it) but now it just seems redundant.
Thanks for your input, but the choice of writing style in this comic is deliberate, and intentionally harkens back to the comics of my youth. The intent is to evoke not only the first-person style of so much “sword & planet” fiction, but to convey the main character’s emotional perspective on what’s happening. Sure – you could follow the action of the tale by the art alone – Gene’s an excellent graphic storyteller – but you’d have a lot less insight into Donovan Hawke’s personality, and thus, only part of the story. I hope that as the adventure goes along (we’re only on page five, after all) you’ll get a better idea of what I’m going for, and see that Hawke’s perspective (via the captions) adds an extra layer to the storytelling.
Right, we can follow the action just with the art, but I am enjoying the captions nonetheless.